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Collaborative poems can be difficult; Love Is Sweet - Essama And His Group - Essama And His Group can either be too obviously different from one another or seem rather like a collage. In the first stanza I felt that the lines 'this magical world Rime Of The Ancient Mariner - Iron Maiden - The Kings Of The Twilight Zone secrets and beauty in the fragrance of meadows' was slightly weak.
In Bruno Nicolai - The Case Of The Scorpions Tail (Vinyl, LP, LP) 'fragrance of meadows' is a rather 'familiar' phrase. The second stanza I felt was too 'abstract' and should have made much more use of concrete imagery. Perhaps 'infinite shores' might have been expressed in a fresher way; perhaps 'the symphony of nature' might have been replaced by a Love Is Sweet - Essama And His Group - Essama And His Group familiar expression.
Add to list. The first and third stanza written by me, the second and fourth stanza by Chinaski. One of the aspects of our poetic group is Universal Spirituality Poster designed specially for this poem by Mrslilboo, a member of Soul Asylum Group. Maybe I have explained it poorly. Oddities - A weaving brightness of beautiful branches delight the senses.
A vastness in this emotional fair piece of poetry. Thank you for a moment of your time. Essama Chiba - Thank you dear poet for such a gracious and poetic review, I'm truly glad that you liked our Mystical Circles.
Best wishes to you from Cairo. Angel-Wings - Excellent write describing two souls of nature brought together in a magical light called earth. Well done dear poet and good luck in this contest. Essama Chiba - Thank you my dear Angel for your uplifting commentary, I appreciate it. Ogbest Ezekiel - Such a good poem of collaborations, l enjoy your message and the poetic stances therein.
Clever piece! Essama Chiba - Thanks you so much my dear friend Ezekiel, I'm truly glad that you enjoyed our collab. BlueAutumn88 - Thanks essama. I pinned this. It take you to a magicalmystical world to discover a new journey rich of beauty and passion. I can say enough to give justice to this poem!
Essama Chiba - Thank you so much my dear Salwa for your heartwarming and uplifting commentary, the world is magical when enlightened souls are connected in mystical realms and inspire one another. Ilovepoems - My pleasure! Chinaski - So much appreciating your kind words on our behalf.
Essama is my inspiration and spiritual guide. This collaboration is a tribute to our journey together for peaceful union of our world. Essama Chiba - Thank you for your feedback. Stodgy - Essama! Love the spirituality and infinity of this poem! You always strive to unlock the deepest mysteries of life and that I appreciate the same way I appreciate the falling pirouetting leaves! Essama Chiba - Thanks Stodgy for your insightful review, I have been a seeker on the spiritual path all my life and the truth is that little do we know but as you said, we strive to unlock the mysteries of life.
I'm truly glad that you liked my collab with Cal representing the essence of our group Soul Asylum. Essama Chiba - Thanks Emliana, I'm glad that you liked it.
Chinaski - Such a pleasure to write this with you Essama Never imagined for the enormous response. Essama Chiba - Yes neither did I, but obviously the Chemistry between us is magical.
Congratulations on winning Gold. Oriental scent - My dear friend, always such a pleasure to read your poems, a magic moment, a flow, beauty and wisdom, all so Thelma Erve - The Eskies - After the Sherry Went Round and beautiful Great poem, congrats on the gold!
Essama Chiba - Thank you so much my dearest Maude for your heartwarming commentary and kindness, I sincerely appreciate it. Essama Chiba - Thanks Dave, I'm glad that you liked it. Heavenly Angel - Most wonderfully written collaboration! Thank you for sharing! Essama Chiba - Thanks my dear friend Heavenly, I'm glad that you liked it.
Best to you always. Iqbal Osman - Wow, this is stunning the imagery is awesome, most brilliantly penned. Essama Chiba - Thanks Iqbal, I sincerely appreciate your uplifting feedback. Deleted: Essama Chiba - Hi, I invite you to join our group Soul Asylum, we have a radio show every Friday and we are going to publish our first Anthology. Deleted: Iqbal Osman - Hi Essama, I am on the group already, I have a poem on the reading list, "Fleeting existence", been commenting a bit today.
Please take a look at the poem. Deleted: Essama Chiba - I will, remember to add Hip Hop Police - Detect - Triple Threat of your poems to the Anthology topic thread.
Deleted: Iqbal Osman - Okay, will do. Stephen76 - This is a wonderful collaboration of friendship and love. Also caused me to recall a beautiful song. Great job! Essama Chiba - Thanks a lot Stephen, we appreciate your feedback and glad that you liked our collaboration representing Soul Asylum spirit.
Which song are you referring to? Stephen76 - I love Elvis too! Essama Chiba - Thanks James, the spiritual bonds of Soul Asylum members are very special and precious. James George - Yes, indeed. Mark Andrew J Terry - The poem celebrates the "magical" connection poets have in the Soul Asylum Group, sharing "secrets" and "beauty" through their poetry. I loved the idea of "forgotten gardens" still pulsing their "rhythms" The third stanza turns, like a sonnet's volte, with a Love Is Sweet - Essama And His Group - Essama And His Group Let the music flow It was then I really fell into the poem and followed its "twirling pirouettes" to the enjoyable end.
Nicely done. Thoughts on structure: The sentence fragments punctuated as a sentence tripped me up, so I would consider losing the Love Is Sweet - Essama And His Group - Essama And His Group punctuation altogether as the poem reads well without it. The strength of the last two stanzas carry the poem.
Essama Chiba - Thank you so much for your positive critique and insightful analysis of the poem and the spiritual essence of Soul Asylum Group. I'm truly pleased that you liked it and I agree with your thoughts on the structure and will take your advice and let it flow losing the end punctuation.
Thank you for Love Is Sweet - Essama And His Group - Essama And His Group it out, I sincerely appreciate. Summer Poet - This poem conveys the spiritual essence of your group in a simple yet engaging way. The writing is seamless, as if written by a single skilled poet. Essama Chiba - Thank you Summer for your positive critique, this style of writing is inspired by mystical poets like Rumi.
Simple and engaging but carries the essence of spirituality. JaboUK - This is beautiful, spiritual and uplifting. I enjoyed it - a clever collaboration. Essama Chiba - Thank you so much my dear Janet, I'm truly glad that you enjoyed my piece.
It's been a while and I missed you, hope all is well. I'm just getting used to widowhood. Essama Chiba - What, your husband passed away, I had no idea, when did that happen? My sincere condolences to you my dear friend Janet, may his soul rest Music Makes Me High - Various - MCA 2 År peace and may God give you the strength Hoffnung - Slime - Schweineherbst deal with the loss of your lifetime partner.
I have been widowed for many years now and it's hard. JaboUK - He died in February. As you say, it's hard, but it's no good sitting around and moping is it? I'm coping.
Essama Chiba - Yes, I absolutely agree, life goes on and we still have our children and grandchildren as a continuity of the love we shared, I see my husband in their eyes. JaboUK - That is so true. A P haikusaur - Chiba Tayta the knots of beauty is deep Essama Chiba - But you are in this whirlwind of mystical circles as a member of Soul Asylum.
Michael FitzGerald - Collaborative poems can be difficult; they can either be too obviously different from one another or seem rather like a collage. This avoids both those traps. There is some excellent imagery in this piece which I found very effective.
But the third and fourth stanzas are excellent. But overall there is some very fine writing in this piece. Essama Chiba - Thank you very much Michael for your positive critique, I agree with your analysis and Bo Selekta (Distorted Robocops Remix) - Various - The Game (File) think you have a point.
The first stanza could have been stronger and some phrases used are familiar no doubt but the subject of spirituality is a little restrictive in Au Temps Des Donjons - Robert Desnos Dit Par Olivier Hussenot - Robert Desnos Dit Par Olivier Hussen of words, we can't help but repeating ourselves sometimes.
I have written many spiritual poems but this is our first Collab on this topic with my dear Cal, hopefully not the last. Essama Chiba - Thanks my dear Pam for your thoughtful commentary, much appreciated.
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